Words to Avoid
Avoid                                                        Replace With

Enlisted Surface Warfare Specialist                     ESWS

CPO X is a natural leader                                       Specify how good

Significantly contributed to…                                  Coordinated

effortlessly led                                                           flawlessly led

responsible for coordinating                                   Coordinated

reputation for                                                             What he did/does

in a meticulous manner                                            Meticulously (if you must)

First Class Petty Officers                                         E6s

Leading Petty Officers                                             LPOs

reduced X by 25%                                                   Specify how, what he did

several complex                                                       items

uncanny patience                                                     Do not use

diversity                                                                     Do not use unless you   
                                                            can explain

System expert program that is model for dept/ship
                                                            Be specific